Jack, James, Kris, Victor, and I were playing hide and seek. I went and hid on a tree cause I wanted to win so badly, cause Kris said whoever would win could get 20$, but I knew he was lying cause he would never share any of his money.
5 minutes later
“ACE! ACE! Where are you, you won already”.Kris shouted
“Did I actually?” I replied
“NO!, BUT CAN YOU COME I CAN'T FIND JAMES AND JACK”.
I carefully climbed down the tree and asked Kris if he wanted to play on the swings he replied with a yes. While We were playing on the swings I tried to make Kris laugh by going on the baby swing so I climbed on the swing until my two legs got stuck in the baby swing. I screamed and tried to slip my leg out.
“Kris help me, I'm stuck, I can't get out.”
“Haha, funny Ace.”
“No really, I'm not lying, help me.”
“Oh crap you're not lying, ok stay here I'm gonna get Jack, James and Victor.”
“Ok but please be fast.”
15 minutes later
“Kris hurry up!”
“Ok wait I haven't found them yet.”
“Just yell their names out loud you idiot
“ Ok fine, Jack Victor James hurry up Ace got stuck in the baby swing.”
“OK.” James Victor and Jack screamed altogether
They all climbed carefully down the tree.
“Ok, what happened ACE.”
“I tried to make Kris laugh and went into the baby swing to make Kris laugh.”
“Are you ok,'' said James.”
“Do I look ok to you idiot.”
“Sorry bruv just saying.”
“It’s alright now hurry up and get me out of this thing.”
“Alright, I’ll hold the swing.” Kris said “
“We’ll pull him out.” Victor & Jack said together
“What am I gonna do?” asked James
“Sit there and wait till we ask for help.” Kris said
“Ok, but why am I always left out.” James asked
Cause you never say anything.”Kris said
“Guys I’m waiting.”
“Whoops forgot about you.”
How could you forget about me? and hurry up and get me out of this thing.”
“Ok go on 1, 3….2….1 PULL!.” I screamed
They all pulled as hard as they could.
I closed my eyes and my head landed on the hard barked floor
“Oooow.” I opened my eyes carefully
“I’M FREE!” I screamed
“Shut up.” Kris said
“Make me.”
“Sure come here you weak dumbo.”
“Woah I was kidding, can't you take a joke.”
“Learn to make one.”
The End 😋
I love your story because it made me laugh. You have a good beginning, middle, and end. The beginning is excellent because you carefully set the scene. The dialogue between the characters is good. It sounds authentic, like some real friends joking with each other. I hope you enjoyed working with Aisea on this story.
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